Cultura Inglesa - Marcos: 2nd composition (Oct 2006)

ased on the extract below, I was asked to write a new composition, a proposal to have changes in the currect situation of a school where I am a student. I tried to keep as much formal as possible, as I was required to do. Feel free to read it and comment on it in a way that we can have development of our skills, any kind of suggestions are acceptable.

Extract:

... student motivation throughout the institution is generally high, and there was evidence of learning taking place. However, the facilities available to both students and teachers are outdated and uninspiring. There is little for students to do outside the classroom and nothing to tempt them to stay in the building for longer than necessary. The environment is not conducive to the full learning experience which should be the benchmark of the 21st century.

Composition:

Proposal to the school restructure

Current situation

The facilities that our school can provide our students nowadays are unfortunately outdated and uninspiring. It is quite noticeable that, to certain extend, all students feel comfortable and under a reliable shelter here; however, I highly recommend a restructure concerning some facilities we have got so as to boost our interest in learning and exploiting what the school can offer thoroughly.

Recommendations

In order to achieve a higher satisfaction of our students while at school and also making available useful facilities that can allow them to progress towards the labour market successfully in future, I consider as important to take advantage of our available money to finance the construction of a new library and possibly a playground.

The current library contains only rather aged books, outdated, with no proper content available for students of this age. They were perfectly applicable to former societies which were completely different from today’s. Having said that, investing in the purchase of updated books would be a good deed, rather, indispensable for the proper and effective development of our students. To elaborate on that, new books would draw everyone’s attention for being directly connected with real facts, students will surely be able to comprehend the real world as it is, the causes and effects, the ins and outs of our modern society, what is utterly paramount for the formation of prosperous citizens.

Besides the library, constructing a playground would offer students what to see and do when outside the classroom, away from the rustle and bustle of the city, preventing the increasing number of teenagers involved in illegal activities in the streets to rise, such as being on drugs. On the contrary, the number could be considerably reduced.

Conclusion

By changing so, everybody is going to face the benefits of a considerable reservoir of information and the school will surely have condition to achieve its basic aim, the proper future formation, allowing the country the suitable progress to become part of the first world some day.